Fiction

Getting the Point

28th September 2019 — 9

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Fiction

Getting the Point

28th September 2019 — 9

This week’s writing prompt courtesy of Carrot Ranch’sFlash Fiction Challenge is to write a 99-word story (no more no less) about someone unremembered. What could be worst than forgetting yourself? Some people just don’t get the point, others are asking for it!  


“You forget yourself, sir!” she said, slapping him hard.
He rubbed his cheek, an evil smirk played across his lips. “That’ll cost you.”
“Maybe, but it’ll cost you more,” she taunted.
“You should have said,” he grinned, reaching into his pocket.
She stopped his hand, smiled at him sweetly and pushed him into the chair.
“See, that wasn’t so hard was it.”
“Not at all,” she said, removing the long pin from her hair, long locks cascaded.
Leaning in, she breathed gently on his neck and skilfully jammed the pin precisely into his amygdala.
“You’ll forget yourself,” she whispered.

Cover image courtesy of: Houcine Ncib

9 comments

  • Charli Mills

    28th September 2019 at 5:43 am

    An unexpected twist! I think this character is experienced in her arts. Nicely set up and a chilling punishment.

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  • Chris

    28th September 2019 at 7:18 am

    Thanks Charli, I think he got the thrust of her argument. I need to stop with the double-entendre’s now 😉

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  • Sadje

    28th September 2019 at 8:24 am

    He got what was coming to him. Great story

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    • Chris

      28th September 2019 at 8:36 am

      True, not that he’ll remember 😉

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    • Chris

      28th September 2019 at 3:28 pm

      Which amygdala? I had to look that up. Then Wen gave me an elocution lesson – e-mig-dele evidently, not amy-dala, I prefer mine 😉

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  • Nat

    29th September 2019 at 12:33 am

    It was definitely a dark evening where you are! This was great and I also love the cover image you chose to go with it. 🙂

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    • Chris

      29th September 2019 at 8:28 am

      Thanks Nat. I could blame the magpie’s, or maybe the nights closing in. It’s more likely fallout from a story I’m writing for a Victorian themed horror anthology. It might explain why Wen keeps giving me a worried look though. Loved the cover image, one of those rare times you find a perfect stock image straight off the bat.

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  • Liz H

    29th September 2019 at 5:55 pm

    Savage! Well done <3

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